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October 25, 2006

Tanya: Working Lunch

She heard “Excuse me, miss,” and glanced at him with a barely concealed sneer.

“Miss?”

She ignored him, but noticed that he didn’t leave. He moved closer, slowly. “Miss? I’m with the…”

“Look!” she snapped, “I know it’s a public park, but I’m trying to work. So take your petition or your survey or your begging, and hit the road. Get lost.” She rolled her eyes and turned away.

“Miss,” he whispered, “I’m the carnivore handler from the zoo. I need you to be very still.”

Her eyes watered as the hot blast of rancid breath hit her other cheek.

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Comments

Seriously? I have to sit here sucking all by myself, all day? People!

Posted by: Tanya at October 25, 2006 2:34 PM · Permalink

Sucking!? Surely you jest!

Posted by: Keiran Halcyon at October 25, 2006 2:41 PM · Permalink

Just got my ending to make sense, hit word count - 417 WORDS......

Shit! This story may go bye bye...

Posted by: Kasac at October 25, 2006 2:53 PM · Permalink

Your story didn't suck. Great setup and punchline. Excellent imagery. Made it hard to think about my own story, yours kept coming into mind and getting in the way.

Also made me remember Edloe sitting next to me, breathing hard in my face at the prospect of getting another bit of grilled fish from my plate.

(Maybe if the topics went up at midnight instead of 6:20 you wouldn't be alone for so long...)

Posted by: Laurence Simon at October 25, 2006 3:08 PM · Permalink

Aw, Edloe.

Posted by: Tanya at October 25, 2006 3:25 PM · Permalink

This story is Great! I wish I could suck like this!

Posted by: Jim Parkinson at October 25, 2006 9:12 PM · Permalink

Love it...scary, well done!

Posted by: Stacy at October 25, 2006 9:30 PM · Permalink